Existing first half of the line:
Outside the pavilion, lingering seclusion, the clear fragrance becomes known as lasting love longer
So, which do you think should be chosen for the second half?
Receiving warmth in the boudoir, the long-lasting makeup pleases the heart
In the zither, leisurely sentiments, elegant melodies convey eternal affection
Inside the hall, lingering atmosphere, subtle feelings deepen rational appreciation
Elegant interests of the clear river, leisurely fishing, fish playing among floating duckweed
Inside the room, the fragrance of books, poetry and books pass down the family's prosperity for a thousand autumns
At the pavilion window on a lonely night, wind stirs willows wildly, rain hits floating duckweed
In poetry, expressing nature, understated elegance lingers, revealing ancient reflections
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Didn't pay attention to the tonal pattern, the flat and oblique tones don't match, so it was revised, making it difficult to choose the second half of the line
'Gardenia of Summer Flowers' Lingering quietly outside the pavilion, its pure fragrance reveals enduring love the longer it stays
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Within the pavilion, the surrounding atmosphere, closely hidden meanings, are even more intimate and rationally delightful.
Right now, a lyric that describes Xiao Qian: holding a steamed corn bun in hand, not a drop of oil in the vegetables... Damn, today on 5·20, I finally managed to sneak out of the hospital to have some fun, sigh, didn't expect I was so seriously ill, almost didn't make it. Would the hospital die if they added some oil to the meals?
The poem expresses temperament, with a light, elegant, and lingering reflection on the past; suddenly, it feels like this line…
......Indoors filled with the fragrance of books, the tradition of poetry and books prospers the family for a thousand autumns.
I feel that the first few sentences have a bit of a small flaw, so I want to choose the last sentence.
Okay, the truth is: at first, the feeling was that the first sentence didn't match; there were always flaws and imperfections, so I kept revising and rewriting until the last sentence, resulting in a mess. Actually, several sentences in the post don't fit the couplet.
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